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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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 a bar chart which illustrates the result of how many people buy tea and
Coffee
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 Plus to habits drink in multiple areas In
Australian
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Australia
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.
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, The went to a Cafe for
Coffee
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 or tea in the
last
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 4
weeks
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 shows the highest
Proportion
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proportion
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 of residents compared with the Bought fresh
coffee
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 in the
last
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 4
weeks
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, not only is
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 point clear, but
also
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 the bought instant
coffee
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 in the
last
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 4
weeks
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 the percentage fluctuate throughout the
cities
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 in the survey. Notably, the first option, Bought fresh
Coffee
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 in the
last
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 4
weeks
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,
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Sydney and Melbourne are in the Same level which represents about 43% and the Brisbane and Adelaide are in the lowest which are equally and about 33%.
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, Hobart is in the middle between them and approximately 38%. the Second option, Bought instant
coffee
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 in the
last
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 4
weeks
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, there are a variety of differences between Five
Cities
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Sydeny
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Sydney
are
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 about 45% and the Hobark is high about 59% . In the final option, went to a
cafee
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cafe
 for
Coffee
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 or tea in
last
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 4
weeks
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, the three
cities
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 : Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart are showing
the
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 high proportion over than any other
Cities
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 on the results of the survey.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, weeks, cities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • coffee and tea buying habits
  • instant coffee
  • fresh coffee
  • cafe culture
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • city demographics
  • seasonal trends
  • marketing strategies
  • consumer preferences
  • availability
  • popularity
  • consumption patterns
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