The map below is of the town og Garlsdon. A new supermarket is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town og Garlsdon. A new supermarket is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
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The map indicates two feasible divergent spots for a new supermarket in the village of Garlsdon. One possible location(S1) is outside the town centre, in the countryside which is between the main roads and the
railway
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. It is a closer place to the northwest (Hindon town) which is populated by 10,000.
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an area may ensure a bunch of parking space.
Besides
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, because it is near the
railway
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, a great number of people can visit there. Another analysis of the place is that it is so close to an industry area; that’s why, it may host visitors, as well.
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, the other likely spot is in the heart of the city which is located between two industry regions and in the vicinity of housing.
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, Branston village which is 16km away from the centre of Garlsdon, and Cransdon which includes 29,000 people, is 25km away. Both towns links to Garlsdon with the main road
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Cransdons
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has a
railway
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link. The
railway
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line is nearby,too. So
this
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spot is likely to entertain shoppers who can come from both northwest, southeast, and southwest.
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, neither location is perfect;
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, it seems that s2 has more connections with other towns and in a variety of ways than s1 has. Apart from that, its being in the heart of the centre is another advantage.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words railway with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Infrastructure
  • Accessibility
  • Residential area
  • Commercial development
  • Traffic flow
  • Local employment
  • Economic impact
  • Ecological footprint
  • Congestion
  • Town expansion
  • Urban planning
  • Outskirts
  • Feasibility
  • Sustainability
  • Demographics
  • Necessities
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