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Nowadays, pollution and waste level are increasing rapidly. How does this affect ordinary people? what step can be taken to overcome this problem?

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Due to
 the overcrowded population and development in the world, major problems
such
 as
pollution
 and
waste
 are increasing.
This
 essay will argue about the effect have on people and will propose ideas to overcome the problems. I can have a constant today, a lot of people in big cities suffer
of
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 breathing disability
due to
pollution
 of air.
This
 cause is created by car and fossil energy use
to
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 production in industry. I can
constat
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 in some cities the among of smog which hiding the sky.
Moreover
, the level of
waste
 is huge on
street
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 it brings animals
such
 as rats and
consequently
, increases the illness of the population. Many steps are possible to control our
waste
 and
pollution
.
Firstly
, reduced the number of cars by using trains or buses.
In addition
 to that, using electric cars and replacing fossil energy with renewable energy like solar or wind for industry and residential .
Secondly
, Avoid plastic bottles and bags, which is
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big problem of
pollution
 nowadays.
Thirdly
, recyclable our
waste
. And
then
,
government
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 has to give sustainability to help the population to change their habits of consumption.
overall
,
although
the
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pollution
 and
waste
 increase rapidly, the government and people have many steps to reduce it. Everyone has to be conscious that we have only one earth and we have to protect it, so, it is the responsibility of each human to start to change their consumption.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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