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You recently visited a museum with your old friend and some difficulties during the visit. Write a letter to museum management Why you visited the museum What the problem was What can be done to solve this problem

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Dear Sir/Madam, My name is Deepthi Anil. I am writing
this
 letter to notify you regarding some issues which I have faced during
museum
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a museum
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 visit.
Firstly
, it was a fantastic experience to watch the things in the
museum
. I visited the place on 16/07/2023
along with
 one of my old friends. We met there after a long time, so we decided to visit the
museum
 where we went together from school. Even though we enjoyed
a
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lot and shared
the
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 experiences in our childhood, the problem occurred that we were kind of trapped inside the place. The reason for that there was no
sign board
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 to direct the visitors, so, we came to the same place more than once and missed some important places. It would be great to make sign boards for the visitors to watch each and every
parts
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 of
museum
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.
Otherwise
, kindly hire more staff to lead the visitors. I would like to believe that you will put
this
 suggestion in front of the management and make
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 arrangements. Yours faithfully Deepthi Anil
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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