Describe a toy you liked in your childhood. You should say: What kind of toy it is When you received it How you played it And how you felt about it

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When I was young, everyone must have had a lot of childhood toys
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Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

as
teddy
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

bears, puzzles and
superhero
Fix the agreement mistake
superheroes

It seems that superhero may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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. And me
to
Replace the word
too

The word to may be used incorrectly. Review the following notes to determine the appropriate usage for your context.

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, my
favorite
Change the spelling
favourite

The spelling of favorite is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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toys
Fix the agreement mistake
toy

It seems that toys may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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in my childhood is
Correct article usage
a doraemon

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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doraemon
Change the capitalization
Doraemon

If you don’t want doraemon to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

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teddy
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

bear. On my 7th birthday, my mother gave
to
Correct pronoun usage
it to

It seems that there is a pronoun problem here.

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me. When I was a kid, I
to play
Change the verb form
played

To play doesn’t seem to work here.

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with
Correct pronoun usage
my

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family and pretend to be the
teddy
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

bear
Change noun form
bear's

It seems that this noun form may be incorrect.

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mother,
take
Wrong verb form
taking

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb take. Consider changing it.

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care of and food. When I have
sad
Add an article
a sad
the sad

The noun phrase sad thing seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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thing , I often confide in
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teddy
Add an article
a teddy

The noun phrase teddy bear seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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bear, when my mother is
way
Correct your spelling
away

The word way doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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, I will hug and sleep with
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Use synonyms
teddy
Correct article usage
a teddy

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bear. Doraemon
teddy
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

is my
favorite
Change the spelling
favourite

The spelling of favorite is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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childhood gift, and I have
experience
Change the verb form
experienced

It appears that the verb experience should be in the past participle form. Consider changing it.

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many memories with
me
Correct pronoun usage
him

It seems that there is a pronoun problem here.

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, and I consider
Correct article usage
the doraemon
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Correct article usage
the doraemon

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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doraemon
Change the capitalization
Doraemon
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teddy
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

as my little brother.

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Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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