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A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern word. Do you think that benefits of tourism outweigh its drawbacks?

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Childhood memories are always special and I think toys play an important role in shaping those memories. One of my favourite toys in my childhood was a toy
robot
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. It was an electronic
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 with dark blue colour with many sophisticated textures. It had a delightful design with shiny wheels and silver weapons which aroused my curiosity. At
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I thought that it was an ordinary
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 which had
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 same design as other robots, I couldn’t believe that it had a special transformation from a monotonous
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 to a super toy car. When I played it, I couldn’t deny the special abilities that my
robot
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 could showcase his appearance through his transformation. I put him on the table and changed his model. Once in a
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, I took out his weapons and transformed him into a car as an unarmed military Humvee
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 let him through my Lego buildings and smashed it. It was exciting. In a nutshell, not only he gave me an eye cherry
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 his cool appearance, but he was
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 an imaginary friend who played with me every day and enjoyed my creativity.
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 he was a toy, he was my unforgettable memory when I was a child.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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