Describe a toy you liked in your childhood What kind of toy it is When you received it How you played it And how you felt about it
Everyone certainly had a childhood toy and do I. In all of the toys, I was often attracted to gentle beauty so
that
Correct word choice
apply
dolls
and barbies
were Capitalize word
Barbies
the
first choice at that time. Those Change the word
my
dolls
were thought of as decoration; however
, they were manufactured with items such
as various clothes, fashion
accessories. Correct word choice
and fashion
Although
I was in love with barbies
, I didn’t ask my parents to buy them. My mother had given me a contract that she would give me a new doll if I got a high score in the Capitalize word
Barbies
end of term
test.
When I was Add a hyphen
end-of-term
second
grade, I got 10 points Change preposition
in second
in
Change preposition
on
math
test. After Add an article
the math
a math
that
my mom gave me a family doll as promised. I was so excited that I took it out and played it. Impersonating characters was the most interesting way to play Add a comma
,that
dolls
. Normally, I often invited my friends in the neighborhood
Change the spelling
neighbourhood
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
pretending
to be characters Wrong verb form
pretended
such
as Add an article
a teacher
teacher
with students, Fix the agreement mistake
teachers
family
. Correct word choice
and family
Finally
, playing dolls
helped me Change preposition
with dolls
expressing
emotion.Wrong verb form
express
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite