The maps below show the changes in a town after the construction of a hydroelectric power dam.

The maps below show the changes in a town after the construction of a hydroelectric power dam.
The two maps illustrate how a
town
looked in 1990 and after the construction of how it was in 2010. It is evident that the
town
has greatly modernized with the addition of new facilities and the transformation and relocation of existing features. In 1990, the forest of the
town
could be seen in the north-east side which was opposed to the mountains in the north-west. Ancient structures and rare plants and animals could be found on the left,
while
villages at the right.
However
, in 2010, the
town
witnessed many alternations. The most noticeable one perhaps has happened on the northern side of the
map
. The river which split the
map
into two was running from the between the
map
transferred to the southern side. The forest, the ancient structure and the mountains had been cleared to make a lake. Rore plants and animals have been converted into electricity and the villages were moved to the bottom of the
map
. And it was cleared to make a hotel,
Finally
, the river could be seen at the bottom of the
map
with a reduction and it can lead to a hydroelectric power dam.
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