Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience.

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For me, I definitely think that
tourism
brings a lot of disadvantages to the
environment
.
Although
the profit of
this
domain is extremely high, it
also
help
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some developing countries
on improving
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their lives and many benefits for
people
, but it is not good for nature.
Due to
the
significantly
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development of
tourism
, it causes
unbalance
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in
ecological
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the ecological
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environment
for flora and fauna and many negative impacts like
this
.
Firstly
,
tourism
is a field that has
a
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strongly
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growth in
the
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recent years. Thanks
for
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it,
people
can harness maximally about natural resources and through that everybody from other countries can connect
together
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and share something about their cultures, but it is
a
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fastest way to destroy the beauty of nature. On account of the number of tourists, it increases day by day and never
stop
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until the beauty spots are completely ruined. When the holidaymakers visit some famous places, a few
people
will discuss the culture and one of them sometimes has some vulgar words,
this
can make the local
people
feel unhappy because
this
is their
traditions
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tradition
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. In my opinion, I think many toxic ways like that of tourists are bad and we must have some solutions to address the problem. In my view, the government plays an important role in our lives and they must raise awareness of every individual
by
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many ways
such
as
pay fined
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if you don’t obey the rules and listen to the
message
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messages
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from the
environment
.
People
have to protect the
environment
and the traditions that
was
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built by
the
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ancestors. They must realize that everything around them is seriously undermined. Everybody should respect and preserve what they
are having
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now.
This
is the best
ways
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way
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to reduce the drawbacks of
tourism
.
Finally
, I think all things around us should be loved and respected.
Don’t
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just because of the momentary profit,
human
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humans
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will face
to
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more challenges if they continue to develop
country
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the country
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by
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in
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this
way.
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Expand on the negative effects of tourism on the environment and local cultures. Use specific examples and evidence to support your points.
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