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The graph below shows the average consumption of cheese per person in England, Scotland, Wales and Nothern Ireland between 1980 and 2020.

The graph below shows the average consumption of cheese per person in England, Scotland, Wales and Nothern Ireland between 1980 and 2020.
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The chart illustrates the average amount of
cheese
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 eaten by citizens of England, Scotland, Wales and Northern Ireland from 1980 to 2020.
Overall
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, England’s figures declined steadily throughout the period, and Scotland saw a significant decline by the end,
whereas
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 people in Wales and in Northern Ireland both increased their
cheese
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 consumption during these decades. Despite being the largest consumer of
cheese
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 for each decade, England’s figures fell consistently from roughly 112
kg
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 in 1980 to approximately 88
kg
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 in 2020. Meanwhile, Scotland started with about 85kg before jumping to roughly 105
kg
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 in 1990. From that point, the figures dropped significantly until it was down to approximately 55
kg
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 in 2020. Wales went from having the second-lowest figure in 1980, roughly 45
kg
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, to having the second-highest average consumption of
cheese
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 in 2020 with approximately 80
kg
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 after increasing throughout the entire period. Northern Ireland showed increases every decade and went from about 12
kg
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 in the beginning to roughly 60
kg
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cheese, kg with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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