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Some feel that government shoul prioritize healthcare instead of other importand areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#feel #government #shoul #prioritize #healthcare #importand #areas
Health preservation plays a vital role in human life and
government
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 should take it into consideration. It is argued by some people's health protection is the most important aspect of
humans'
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 life.
While
 I firmly agree that there are other sectors
such
 as environmental conservation and education which are essential all over the world and have
mutual
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 effect on each other as government should keep a balance among them. On the one hand, having great service in Healthcare is essential for all people because it gives people a chance to live healthier and reduce the rate of mortality.
Moreover
,
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 both mentally and physically lead to a healthy society.
Therefore
,
government
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the government
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 should allocate their attention to
the
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apply
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healthcare services.
For example
, in developed countries
such
 as
th
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the
 US or Europe professional treatment
available
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 for their nations and be under
supervision
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the supervision
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 of doctors regularly.
Consequently
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 they are less likely
suffer
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 from serious illnesses and diseases compared with other undeveloped countries.
On the other hand
, despite the importance of attention to healthcare authorities bear responsibility for other sectors too like environmental protection
as well as
 education.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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