More and more people are eating healthy food and exercise regularly. What are the reasons for that? What can we do to make other people do the same?

This
has been
evedent
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evident
that extra focus is required on
individual's
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an individual's
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health to maintain
work-lifeworklife
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work-life work life
balance.
Hence
, maximum
people
are eating hygienic food and doing daily workouts. In
this
essay, I will cover the reasons for
this
development and
idea
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the idea
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to get it implemented by
othrs
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others
.
To begin
with,
People
are mainly focused on diet and daily exercise
such
as walking, yoga etc., because local
people
have understood the benefits of physical and mental health.
In addition
, laziness and seating on a chair for
long
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time
that
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apply
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will
also
increases
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the weight,
however
, sports keeps the person fit by controlling the
overall
body weight.
For example
, Indian
people
have
less
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fewer
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heart related
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heart-related
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issues due they are keeping themselves
more
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apply
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fit and having
with
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apply
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less weight by playing cricket and football.
Furthermore
, some kind of dite food contains
for
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apply
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nutrition which boots the hamon level and helps the
people
to become more productive. Most of the frozen foods and sweets only
gives
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taste rather
then
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than
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increasing the immune power but ordinary authentic homemade cooked food gives both, taste and stamina.
For instance
, Western culture
have
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started adopting the
indian
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Indian
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culture to
ingore
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ignore
more
pizza and pasta from their routine meal and accepted only boiled rice and fresh vegetable. In conclusion, awareness can play a vital role to be accepted by
rest
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the rest
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of the world to follow the standard practice that
need
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needs
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to focus on eating habits and workout. Government should increase taxes on
such
product
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products
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which are harmful
for
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to
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the
country
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country's
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people
and exempt on few to promote
right
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the right
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practices
such
as running yoga classes and gyms. Not only
this
, there must be high Penalties if anyone
break
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breaks
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the rules.
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