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The internet has dramatically atlered our lives over the past few decades. Although some of these changes have been negative, the overall effect of this technology has been positive. What are your opinion on this? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience

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Our dependency on
internet
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 has changed our living
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 completely in
this
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people
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maintainng
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maintaining
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relationship
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 with the advent of
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internet
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, they still gain
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advanntage
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advantage
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this
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life
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general
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 public
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 far better off
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using the
internet
 despite the challenges they inevitably face. Primarily, the greatest advantage of using
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internet
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 is that
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 it will keep us updated about every
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challege
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challenge
 we face in our
life
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 it is related to our studies, job or regarding our country. If you visit a
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 country where
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people
 are utilizing
this
 tech giant, you will feel that there is a major difference between the
people
 who use
this
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compared to the public who is not aware
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 to use it.
For example
, when
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 visited Somalia
few
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 years ago,
i
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 found out that their kids and young children were not innovative in ideas as compared to our kids who are using youtube quite often and take
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 of
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 on little issues. These
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ultra-challenging
ultra challenging
 experiences are paradoxically the main advantage of using the
internet
 because it has the capacity
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reshapping
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reshaping
reshipping
 the
life
 of every human being on
this
 planet Earth.
Secondly
, the biggest concern of the general public who is using
internet
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 is that
the
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people
 especially the new
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generation
is
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 finding it difficult in making
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 friendships and relationships. The reason behind
this
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dilemma
 is that
young
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 generation made an
imaginery
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imaginary
 world of romance by watching videos or surfing on
internet
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 which is not relevant to the realistic world.
For instance
, we can watch
this
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schools where students pass most
their
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 time talking with
internet
 AI friends
instead
 of interacting with
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 classmates who are sitting next to them. Oftentimes, I felt
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embarrassed
 that we are part of
such
 a society which is not
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related
 to our
fore fathers
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forefathers
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 where maintaining a
relation
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 is a
priorirty
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priority
 for the family. To
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conclude
,
usage
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 of
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internet
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 has become incredibly common.
While
people
 sometimes face challenges in their personal
life
 with its usage, it is still the most
relaible
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reliable
 medium for their own growth. As a contradiction of sorts, it is the usage of
internet
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 which makes it beneficial or fruitless for
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society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global connectivity
  • Information superhighway
  • Digital economy
  • Virtual communication
  • Cybersecurity
  • Online platforms
  • E-learning
  • Cloud computing
  • Remote access
  • Social networking sites
  • Digital footprint
  • Misinformation
  • Data privacy
  • E-commerce
  • Telecommuting
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