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A magazine wants to include contributions from its readers for an article called 'The book that influenced me most'. 1.describe what this book was about 2.explain how this book influenced you 3.say whether this book would be likely to influence other people

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 or Madam I would
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 called What Men Live By by the Tolstoy.
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 is very thin and it is included only 3 stories. Each story gives
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separate
life
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 lesson. Today ı want to share my feedback about
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. As ı mentioned before,
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 has 3 short stories. I read
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 on the recommendation of
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 brother. As long as ı read
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 ı influenced so much. Because,
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just time.
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 humankind makes
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. When they make
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 that unfortunately they miss at the moment. The
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 gives to message to
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, there is no need
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lots
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. Stay in the moment and enjoy it.
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human's
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 ambitions.
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their deserves and sometimes they forget their family,
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and healthy
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,
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me, we have lots of passion and because of the reach them, we try to
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 some of them have reached
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 but they have lost their time. Time
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 of the important things for
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humankind.
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, covetousness,
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conclusion,
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 is perfect even masterwork. I think Everybody who
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rewiev
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review
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, should read it. My
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. I learnt that stay in the moment. I am sure that
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everybody who
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read it.
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