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A magazine wants to include contributions from its readers for an article called 'The book that influenced me most'. 1.describe what this book was about 2.explain how this book influenced you 3.say whether this book would be likely to influence other people

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Dear
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 or Madam I would
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like
 to talk about the most influenced
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me
book
.
its
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 called What Men Live By by the Tolstoy.
This
book
 is very thin and it is included only 3 stories. Each story gives
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seperate
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separate
life
 lesson. Today ı want to share my feedback about
this
book
. As ı mentioned before,
This
book
 has 3 short stories. I read
this
book
 on the recommendation of
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 brother. As long as ı read
this
book
 ı influenced so much. Because,
Firstly
,
this
book
 mentions
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just time.
This
 means that
,
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 humankind makes
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about
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future
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the future
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. When they make
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a plan
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 that unfortunately they miss at the moment. The
book
 gives to message to
reader
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the reader
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, there is no need
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for lots
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lots
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 of
plan
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about
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future
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. Stay in the moment and enjoy it.
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,
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book
 mentions
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human's
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 ambitions.
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 to say, Humans lost
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their deserves and sometimes they forget their family,
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,
life
.
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 point of the
book
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me, we have lots of passion and because of the reach them, we try to
everyday
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 and
while
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 some of them have reached
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 but they have lost their time. Time
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 of the important things for
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humankind.
Thirdly
, covetousness,
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that
 means that if somebody wants to have everything, you make sure he/she does not gain at the
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this
 reason, I think People can not want to
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.
On
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the
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conclusion,
This
book
 is perfect even masterwork. I think Everybody who
are
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rewiev
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review
 their
life
, should read it. My
life
 vision has been changed by the
book
. I learnt that stay in the moment. I am sure that
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book
 influenced
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everybody who
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read it.
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