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Many people hold the view that it is better to buy their home rather they rent it. Do you agree with this statement or not ?

#people #home #rent
There are many individual’s
point
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 of
views
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view
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that is
 more suitable to purchase homes
instead
 of renting them. The writing totally agrees with that statement which will be discussed
through
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this
 essay. First
at
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of
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 all, owning a
house
 if you
free
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are free
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 at finance is better than
rent
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renting
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 it from landlords. In our home, people are going to be more independent
also
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and also
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more
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have more
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 freedom. There are many options or styles you can choose to design your home whatever you want
also
 it can easily change if you really want to do that. People can decide their
house
’s
colors
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, fix it or build some new room
to
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spread out and so on.
Moreover
, they will be able to have
theirs
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their
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 garden where they can freely plant, a pool or a
film-room
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film room
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 in the basement. People could get any
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of theirs
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theirs
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their
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signature
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signatures
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 which is providing most convenient to them.
Secondly
, if you
owning
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own
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 a
house
 in law, it is
opportunities
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opportunity
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 to sell it or
for
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to
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 rent it when you move to
another places
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another place
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. Nowadays, the
grown
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growth
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 of
population
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the population
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 forces the price of renting or buying a
house
 more and more costly about 4 percent of rising per year. So it
great
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is great
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 to
buying
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buy
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 a
house
 early which could be your financial support in the future.
Otherwise
,
that is
 a bit problem to solve
after
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apply
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if you
not
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are not
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 used to
purchase
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purchasing
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 your own
house
.
To conclude
, everybody clearly observes the benefit of owning homes rather than
rent
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renting
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 them. Purchasing homes is
the
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 good way to choose which is solving the financial and
lifestyles
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 problems better.
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