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Band 4.5

Many people hold the view that it is better to buy their home rather they rent it. Do you agree with this statement or not ?

#people #home #rent
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There are many individual’s
point
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 of
views
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view
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that is
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 more suitable to purchase homes
instead
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 of renting them. The writing totally agrees with that statement which will be discussed
through
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in
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this
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 essay. First
at
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of
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 all, owning a
house
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 if you
free
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are free
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 at finance is better than
rent
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renting
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 it from landlords. In our home, people are going to be more independent
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also
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and also
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more
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have more
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 freedom. There are many options or styles you can choose to design your home whatever you want
also
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 it can easily change if you really want to do that. People can decide their
house
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’s
colors
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colours
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, fix it or build some new room
to
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apply
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spread out and so on.
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, they will be able to have
theirs
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their
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 garden where they can freely plant, a pool or a
film-room
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film room
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 in the basement. People could get any
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of theirs
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theirs
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their
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signature
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signatures
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 which is providing most convenient to them.
Secondly
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, if you
owning
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own
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 a
house
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 in law, it is
opportunities
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opportunity
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 to sell it or
for
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to
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 rent it when you move to
another places
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another place
other places
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. Nowadays, the
grown
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growth
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 of
population
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the population
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 forces the price of renting or buying a
house
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 more and more costly about 4 percent of rising per year. So it
great
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is great
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 to
buying
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buy
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 a
house
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 early which could be your financial support in the future.
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,
that is
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 a bit problem to solve
after
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apply
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if you
not
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are not
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 used to
purchase
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purchasing
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 your own
house
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.
To conclude
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, everybody clearly observes the benefit of owning homes rather than
rent
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renting
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 them. Purchasing homes is
the
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a
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 good way to choose which is solving the financial and
lifestyles
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lifestyle
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 problems better.
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