Do you believe that experimentation on animals for scientific purposes is justified? Are there any alternatives to animal experimentation?

I totally think that
experimentation
on
animals
for scientific aims is
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because
this
way
help
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scientists to make sure a new
druge
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drug
is safer for
humans
,
however
, I would like to suggest some alternatives to animal
experimentation
including,
humans
cells
, and computer
programs
. On the one, I
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believe
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experimentation
on
animals
for scientific
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is merit.
This
is because
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a
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new
drugs
in
animals
can help scientists to know about
long
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and short impacts of
drugs
, which
this
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apply
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can contribute to
ensure
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a new
drugs
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is
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safer for
humans
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consumption.
Thereofore
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Therefore
,
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exmerimenation
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experimentation
on
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animals
assist to fight many diseases, which
this
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can enhance
people
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health.
Furthermore
,
make
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experiment
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on
animals
is extremely cheap than other methods, which mean researchers can do plenty of
research
.
As a result
, more medical
research
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scientist
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scientists
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are more likely to discover
a
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new
drugs
for serious diseases namely, cancer, heart attack, and asthma in faster time, which
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can speed up
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proces
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process
of
discover
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a new medications
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.
On the other hand
, I would like to recommend alternatives method to animal
experimentation
. The first alternative way is
humans
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cells
. To illustrate, researchers can collect some
cells
from
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body in order to do their
research
. The second alternative method is computer
programs
. To demonstrate,
scientist
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scientists
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can use simulation
programs
to do their
research
.
For example
,
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famuos
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famous
smulation
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simulation
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program
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called
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CTC, which
this
program have a huge
data base
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about
body
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structure of a wide range of
animals
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species.
Consequently
, these methods help to
boosts
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medical
researches
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away from using
animals
.
To sum up
, I strongly believe
experimentation
on
animals
is worth
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to can improve
humans
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health,
however
, I suggested some alternatives method to do experiments namely,
humans
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cells
,
simulation
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and simulation
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programs
.
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