The Internet has dramatically altered our lives over the past few decades. Although some of these changes have been negative, the overall effect of this technology has been positive. What are your opinions on this?
In
last
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the last
years
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,years
technology
has been increasing crucially as well as
it connect
with every human day to day Change the verb form
connects
life
. While
some of these trend
have been pros, Change the determiner
this trend
these trends
other
one has been drawbacks. In Fix the agreement mistake
others
this
essay, i
will examine both views and explain why I feel that Change the capitalization
I
technology
makes our life
easily and industrialized
rather than Correct quantifier usage
more industrialized
difficulty
.
In Replace the word
difficult
this
sophisticated world, people are running their life
easily with using technology
such
as laptop
, Fix the agreement mistake
laptops
computer
, mobile Fix the agreement mistake
computers
phone
and Fix the agreement mistake
phones
maicrophones
. Correct your spelling
microphones
microphone
Moreover
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,Moreover
this
technical growth are
altered multi-sectors like Change the verb form
is
eduation
, geology ,culture , medicine and ....Correct your spelling
education
consistantly
. Correct your spelling
consistently
constantly
As a consequence
, they can access their life
using Online like booking oppointment
dates, tickets and ... Correct your spelling
appointment
appointments
Thus
, they not only get more free time but finished work also
easily. Truthfully, telecommunication also
improved more than our
thought. Correct pronoun usage
we
For instance
,early
times, vast numbers of people were suffer from Change preposition
in early
communicate
issues with their Replace the word
communication
long distance
relations, nowadays they can quickly connect with Facebook,Add a hyphen
long-distance
viber
, Change the capitalization
Viber
WhatsApp
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and WhatsApp
....
Not Replace the punctuation
...
suprisingly
, Correct your spelling
surprisingly
this
trend may help to improve the
relationship with their beloved ones and friends.
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their
On the other hand
, most students are effected
by Correct your spelling
affected
technology
for
sitting too much of Change preposition
by
time
Correct pronoun usage
their time
infront
of the computer.Sadly, Correct your spelling
in front
this
may lead to health issues
such
as visual-disorder
, back pain, Obesity Correct your spelling
visual disorder
as well as
depression. For instance
, if they using
long periods, Wrong verb form
use
the
communication skills are reduced Change the word
their
hence
the distance between the society inicreased
.Correct your spelling
increases
it
may affect them psychologically like depression.
Capitalize word
It
However
, parents care is reduced
these drawbacks thoroughly. Every Change the verb form
has reduced
parents
should make a rule for using computers and strictly Change to a singular noun
parent
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follow
followed
. Perhaps, increasing communication skills with their friends and society may lead Correct pronoun usage
itfollowed
them
healthy Change the pronoun
their
life
.
To conclude
, this
sensational question is always going to
exist until reduce the drawbacks. Yet,in my perception, overall
Changes have been positive
than negative. I believe, in Correct quantifier usage
more positive
future
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,future
this
beneficial changes increase consistently.Change the determiner
these
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