Some people think government should ban dangerous sports, while others think it is people’s freedom to do whatever sports activities they choose . Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is a matter of debate whether authorities should be strict enough against perilous poor message to children who always tend to imitate the ones who are performing these challenging public , these should totally be prohibited.
sports
or Use synonyms
participants
should be given Correct word choice
whether participants
liberty
to choose any game they like. Correct article usage
the liberty
While
some Linking Words
people
are in Use synonyms
favor
of giving Change the spelling
favour
right
regarding the choice of Fix the agreement mistake
rights
sports
, I believe that brutal Use synonyms
sports
that glorify violence should be banned completely. On the one hand, certain factors justify Use synonyms
people
’s Use synonyms
opinion
regarding the freedom Fix the agreement mistake
opinions
for
these Change preposition
of
games
. Use synonyms
Firstly
, these Linking Words
risk intensive
hobbies are thrilling and exciting which provide a level of excitement with momentary pleasure to the Add a hyphen
risk-intensive
people
who perform them. Use synonyms
Moreover
, by playing them they can even conquer their fear too. Linking Words
Secondly
, laws banning these unsafe Linking Words
sports
can face strong Use synonyms
objection
from individuals who are involved directly or indirectly in these Fix the agreement mistake
objections
games
as they are dependent upon these for their financial needs and family circumstances. Use synonyms
Finally
, they act as an important component of tourism by attracting thousands of Linking Words
people
.Use synonyms
For
Linking Words
example
Add a comma
example,
kick boxing
is played at Correct your spelling
kickboxing
national
level in Correct article usage
the national
USA
and has a huge fan following over there. Correct article usage
the USA
On the other hand
, I assert that Linking Words
state
should take strict action against these Correct article usage
the state
games
Use synonyms
Linking Words
due to
the following reasons. First and foremost, Change preposition
for
its
Correct your spelling
it is
government’s
responsibility to protect its public from any kind of mishappening so they can ensure public safety by imposing a ban on Correct article usage
the government’s
such
kind of hazardous Linking Words
games
. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, it Linking Words
demoralize
others to take part and givesChange the verb form
demoralizes
Add an article
a
the
games
and by doing so they can get distracted from their original aim in life. Use synonyms
Last
but not Linking Words
the
least, Correct article usage
apply
these kind
of adventurous Change the determiner
this kind
these kinds
sports
Use synonyms
also
bring tragedies which resultsLinking Words
into
fatal accidents and players Change preposition
in
as well as
spectators may Linking Words
loose
their precious lives. In conclusion , no doubt one part of Correct your spelling
lose
the
society Correct article usage
apply
criticize
the interference of Change the verb form
criticizes
government
for taking part in any activity which Correct article usage
the government
people
like , Use synonyms
Linking Words
however
I feel that considering the safety ofAdd the comma(s)
however,
Add an article
the
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion