Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some
people
believe that
government
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the government
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should spend
money
on
peoples
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people's
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comfort like
repair
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repairing
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the
railways
however
others
thinks
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think
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that
government
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the government
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should spend
money
on repairing
roads
. I quite agree that
government
should spend
money
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more money
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on
railways
than
roads
. In
this
essay shall outline my reasons for
this
position. The main problem with cities nowadays is the high amount of cars
in
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on
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the streets
that
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can
creating
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a variety of serious issues.
Firstly
, with millions of
people
who all want to arrive fast to their
works
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work
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at the same time, traffic congestion has become particularly bad in some cities.
This
means all of the employees have to either leave to go
work
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to work
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earlier or find an alternative means of
transportation
. Governments are struggling to provide services to comfortable
this
situation for
people
. It means the
government
has
been
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always
try
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trying
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to build new
form
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forms
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of
transportation
to not only be convenient for
people
but
also
decline
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reduce
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the traffic
in
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on
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the
roads
.
On the other hand
,
this
kind of alternative
transportation
have
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has
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much more safety than regular
transportation
ways. Research has found that the most car
crash
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crashes
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in the middle of the
roads
are because of either careless or sleepy drivers who don’t pay enough
attentions
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attention
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to their driving.
In addition
to
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, another essential reason for
government
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the government
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to spend more
money
on the
railways
is the employees who should be at work as soon as possible.
Railways
are going to make everything not only easier but
also
more comfortable for all of us.
To
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overall
, our
government
should take a closer look
to
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at
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this
point of view
that
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apply
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include
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including
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spending
money
on
railways
cause
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because
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its
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it is
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not only
more
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faster but
also
more
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safer for any of us
in
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at
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any age.
Moreover
with
this
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these
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professional alternatives traffic will experience
sharp
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a sharp
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decrease in the
roads
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • environmental footprint
  • efficiency
  • pollution
  • cost-effectiveness
  • economic development
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • air pollution
  • initial investment
  • maintenance
  • upgrades
  • rural
  • urban
  • last-mile connectivity
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