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the most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#aim #science #people #lives
It is believed that the most fundamental role of
science
 is enhancing
humans
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human
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life
 quality. I agree with
this
 opinion to some extent,
however
, I have reasons for disagreement as well that I will discuss in the subsequent paragraphs. Rooting back in history,
science
 has been always the key factor behind the developments of our kind and it has been a tool in governments’ hands to provide better facilities for their societies for a long time. In fact, our history was built upon
science
due to
 the pieces of evidence that prove every little detail of our daily routine was once discovered and improved by a scientist and nowadays
science
 is expected to keep developing people’s
life
 quality. It is not a wrong idea because the aim of better
life
 circumstances is an event that always happened using
science
 and it can help societies to improve even more in different aspects including social, economic, health, trading and so many more to build a better community.
On the other hand
, in the recent
century
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 there have been some issues
due to
 the developments that took place using
science
. One of the most highlighted challenges is environmental problems and misfunctions, in fact, scientists aiming to improve
life
 quality invented facilities, machines, gadgets or even methods that seemed to be beneficial at first but they just considered the benefits of their own kind.
For example
, the improvement of
science
 in Europe led to the industrial revolution which was considered a victory in the first place but the inventions and increased use of natural resources through research and innovations started to form pollution, health and social problems and even caused harm to the earth by depleting the Ozone layer so, I think there should be a balance between using
science
 for human kind’s benefits and the benefits of other kinds and the environment as a whole.
to sum up
, I think
while
science
 should be used as a tool to improve our
life
 situation, there
also
 should be a balance between using
science
 for our own sake and using
science
 to protect other kinds as well even if it would not be advantageous for our community.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • technological advancements
  • medical discoveries
  • life-changing inventions
  • innovations
  • solutions to human problems
  • enhancing quality of life
  • improvement of healthcare
  • transportation
  • communication
  • agriculture
  • energy sectors
  • eradication of diseases
  • prolongation of life expectancy
  • global challenges
  • climate change
  • overpopulation
  • food security
  • developed world
  • underprivileged communities
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