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MamadjonovSamandar: The graph below shows four countries of residence pf overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information ba selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant

MamadjonovSamandar: The graph below shows four countries of residence pf overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information ba selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant
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This
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 provided line graph illustrates the
number
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 of foreign
students
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 who came to study in
Australia
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 from four different countries from 1982 to 2000.
Overall
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, it can be seen that there was an increase in the count of visitors for the purpose of education in
Australia
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 from the four countries over the given time.
To begin
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, in 1982, the count of overseas pupils who visited
Australia
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 to study was very low, and it was only from Hong Kong, at about 1000 and from Malaysia, at nearly 5000, but there was not any student from other countries.
In addition
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 to that, the
number
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 of
students
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 from Hong Kong remained constant until 1987,
then
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; they experienced a fluctuating increase in their
number
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, and they represented the greatest
number
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 of foreign
students
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 between 1991 and 1993 in comparison to others. But for
students
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 from Malaysia, there was a slight elevation in their
number
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 till 1983.
Then
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, they continued constant till 1993, and they increased again to stop, at about 17000, in 2000. Regarding
students
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 from Singapore, they started to go to
Australia
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 for learning in 1987, and their numbers elevated to stand up, at around 19000, in 2000. But, Indonesian
students
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 began to visit
Australia
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 for education in 1983, at about 1000,
then
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; their
number
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 increased gradually over time until they reached 23000, in 2000 which was the highest
number
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 compared to others.
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