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Studies show that many criminals have a low level of education.
For
this
 reason, some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate people in jail so they can get a good job once they are released. To what extent do you agree or disagree with
this
 statement? Over the
last
 2 or 3 decades, the no of crimes happening worldwide has increased dramatically for some reasons. Some research indicates that a significant amount of prisoners have low levels of education. Educate people in jail to get a good occupation once they are released. It would not work well. In
this
 essay, I will explore the reasons for my opinion and draw some conclusions. First and foremost, we can't 100% guarantee that the jailors will get the work after release from their cell since some of the owners prefer to avoid getting an employee who came from the prison
due to
 their customer safety. In
such
 cases, the criminal may get upset, and it would be the reason for them to make faults again.
Secondly
, the convict may need to be in a position to study as these are new for them. Some of them may be very rude to the person who is willing to teach. Educating at the cell may be tedious as they want to deal with the criminals.
On the other hand
, Educating the jailors would be beneficial to understand what is good and evil, which will make them stay away from faults. And
also
, it would be energetic to their mental health
while
 they were in prison. To put everything into a nutshell, Teaching convicts at the prison would not be beneficial in case of jailor's mindset and uncertainty in job opportunities. But it is energetic to their mindset.
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