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Many believe that reading books is a waste of time and children would be better served doing something more useful. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#books #waste #time #children
some individuals may opine that reading novels is a trivial task and infants should be encouraged for other rich activities.
However
, I firmly disagree with
this
 given idea and some notions surround my opinion.
to begin
 with,
books
 are repositories of non-ending knowledge. immersing
to
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this
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 valuable treasures from an early
ages
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 give
this
oppourtinity
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opportunity
 to children to broaden their horizon and leads them
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 their analytical thinking.
As a result
, they would become more rational and smarter
compare
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 to their peers.
for instance
, surveys have shown that
childrens
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 who gained tremendous achievement in their adulthood were among those who craved
for
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reading
books
 in their childhood.
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, reading book is a fantastic way for children to ameliorate their brain's function
furthurmore
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Furthermore
,
books
 are tools to expose people to
others
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expriences
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experiences
 which is a remarkable way for individuals to
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 various vita and acquire the knowledge of living from them. infants from an early
ages
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 can enter
to
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the portal of folk's life and
learning
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 about mistakes they have done.
for instance
, reading historical novels would change
people
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attitude
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 towards a way of behaving which can be destructive even for a country.
to sum up
,
i
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 reiterate that
books
 are
portal
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 to the world of knowledge and not only reading
books
are
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 not a waste of time but
also
 they are essential for children to
leads
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 them
for
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a better life experiments
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better life experiments
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