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many people hold the view that it is better to buy their home rather than rent it . do you agree with this statement or not ?

#people #home #rent
A number of society believe that
purchase
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 homes
instead
 of renting them is better . In my point of view , there are more
positive
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positives
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 to owning a
home
 as it can be an investment and offers a
convinient
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convenient
lifestlye
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lifestyle
. The first reason why
i
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I
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 agree with
this
 statement is the opportunities of investment in buying a
home
 .
This
 is because the price of
house
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the house
a house
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 usually
rise
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rises
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 as the
evironment
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environment
 surround develop .
This
 is true in
this
 case that in the recent survey of UK news show that more than 4% has been
rise
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 in house's price . The second reason
of
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for
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 owning a
home
 is greater as it offers a sense of enjoyable lifestyle . To explain , the owner can have
an
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 ability
of being
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 independent and accomplishable when there
is
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are
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 no rules or
forbiddence
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forbidden
forbiddance
 from anyone.
Due to
 its
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benefits
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benefits
benifits
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 people will be more and more confident with their
home
 In conclusion , there are more advantages
in
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to
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 owning a
home
 rather than leasing it
due to
 it can be a potential investment in the future and allow people can
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access
acess
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access
 to a more comfortable lifestyle
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • property ladder
  • mortgage
  • rental agreement
  • down payment
  • equity
  • appreciate
  • rental market
  • monthly installments
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  • repairs and maintenance
  • landlord
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