Over the past 50 years, young people have gained status and power but old people have lost. What is the cause and is it a good development?

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It is said that the juvenile have gained status and power
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the elderly have lost over the past five decades. In my perspective, the shift has been caused by the development of the
Internet
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and the rapid change in
society
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. And I consider the situation to be a good development
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it has some disadvantages.
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the
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has developed at high speed over
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decades, making it difficult for
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senior citizens to follow.
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, many things
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or news are digitised and
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number of
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people get information on the
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. Because the
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has been introduced in
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the workplace
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, leisure and other aspects
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daily life, the elderly who cannot use online tools well cannot deal with issues effectively.
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,
rapidly
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changing
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has degraded the power of the elderly.
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Senior
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citizens tend to be familiar with methods or custom which were maintained for
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a long
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period, but in modern life, the style of living or habits changes frequently. Because of
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, the elderly cannot adapt to
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modern life well. Admittedly,
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development has drawbacks,
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,
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of the elderly cannot be treated as seriously.
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, in
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society
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in which young people have initiatives, more priority is put on education for children and it
encourage
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economic
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the economic
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growth of the country.
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, the
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to parenting can be provided by governments. The policy for
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generation will enrichen
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society
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. In conclusion, the increasing younger’s power and
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of
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the elderly’s authority
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caused by the increasing use of the
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and changing
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. And the shift is considered to have
benefits
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from the view of
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the next
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generation’s happiness.

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