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In modern society, some people argue that schools become unnecessary as children can study at home via the Internet. Do you agree or disagree?

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In the modern world, some adults encourage
children
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 to study at home on the computer using the Internet
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 of going to
school
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. From my perspective, I strongly disagree with
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 opinion for some reasons listed below. The first reason is that schools that have good teaching methods and appropriate learning materials can lead to well-qualified learning processes for pupils in different learning stages.
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, teachers are experts and specific people who work dedicatedly in the educational area to flourish the young generations' development;
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, their professional guidance has
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 impact on
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's growth.
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, online learning sources are tremendous and result in difficulties for a child to find the correct lessons to self-study effectively without a teacher's instructions. The second reason is that studying at
school
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 is the best way for
children
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 to improve their interpersonal skills. The
school
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's environment, where pupils can socialize and interact with peers, will help them to improve numerous soft skills that will be obviously beneficial for them. A prime example of
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 that by communicating openly with their peers, working in teams, and presenting their presentations in front of others,
children
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 can build confidence, a good listening and sharing attitude, and other valuable characteristics that are impossible to provide by studying online methods. In conclusion, as many have the belief that
children
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 can study by themselves at home with the Internet rather than attending
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 programs, I think
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 not a good idea as studying at
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 offers many undeniable benefits for their development.
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