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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the proportion of inhabitants staying in urban areas in four different Asian nations between 1970 and 2020
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 and a future
population
 projection to 2040.
Overall
 , it is obvious there has been an upward trend in the percentage of citizens living in municipal areas and it is predicted that a large number of the
population
 will continually reside in cities in 2040, with Malaysia reporting the leading figure over most of the period. Notably, Indonesian individuals witnessed
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significant growth in comparison with the remaining countries. In 1970, the rate of
Philippines
 residents in metropolises was just over 30%, which was leading among countries, as opposed to Thailand’s figure, at about 15%. The figure for Thailand’ remained stable
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 about 30% during 30 years before experiencing a steady increase predicted to end at about 50% in 2040. A fluctuation period was seen in the
Philippines
 rate and in 2040 the proportion of citizens will be approximately 55%. In terms of Malaysia and Indonesia, the figures for the two nations were precisely 30% and only 12%, respectively, in 1970.
However
, Indonesia’s
population
 in municipalities soaked and overcame the figures for
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 in Thailand and
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 and it is projected to reach a peak of 60% in 2040. A remarkable increase was
also
 spent in
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, after intersecting with the rate of the
Philippines
 in 1990 and continuously going up;
moreover
, the future
population
 projection is likely to
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 80% in 2040.
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