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In modern society, some people argue that schools become unnecessary as children can study at home via the Internet. Do you agree or disagree?

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Now a day, technological advancements offer us a lot easier way to learn. So many websites and apps provide audio-visual material which makes it easier for children. But on the other way, I think that practical knowledge is
also
 important for children to learn a lesson. Which can only offer by the school. I totally disagree with
this
 statement. In
this
 essay,I will put my viewpoint. In the modern ,era children become kin of laptops and smartphones in which they get a lot of study material in an audio-visual way and
also
 some practice tests. But that doesn't mean they can replace the school. In ,school they can learn a lot of subjects in a single day. though some schools have practice sections , competitions and discussion sections which give pupils a chance to put their views regarding their interested topic and hear others thinking which enhances their knowledge.
Secondly
, more use of digital gadgets for study harms child's mental and physical health
also
. In some ,cases they lead in the wrong direction as well. Though the Internet offers a variety of topics for study they can not replace a teacher.
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