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The line chart below shows the public transport usage in four major cities around the world from 1980 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart below shows the public transport usage in four major cities around the world from 1980 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph represents data regarding the trend curve of public transport usage in four metropoles from 1980 to 2019. Generally speaking,
the
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public means of transportation have become more popular in all the considered cities during
this
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 temporal interval.
However
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, the evolution of these curves is different, with
Tokyo
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,
London
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 and
Sydney
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 facing a constant increase,
whereas
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 New
York
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 rising
more
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slightly. In 1980
Tokyo
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 enjoyed the highest number of commuters (about 25
million
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),
while
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 New
York
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,
London
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, and
Sydney
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 had 20
million
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, roughly 15
million
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 and slightly above 10
million
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 users, respectively. From 1985 to 1995 the
asian
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 capital city enjoyed an increase in the prevalence of public transport usage by 20
million
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 users, a steeper increase than that of the other considered cities. From 1995 to 2000 in
Tokyo
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,
London
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 and
Sydney
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 the incidence of inhabitants profiting
of
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 trains and tubes kept on rising considerably and constantly, reaching a peak in 2019.
On the other hand
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,
New
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York
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 curve almost flattened
from
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 1995 and 2000. In the following
years
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 the tendency grew in an anaemic way, reaching the highest point in 2019, as the other three metropoles, with a little more than 50
million
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of
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commuters. In conclusion in 2019
Tokyo
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 accounted
roughly
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for roughly
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 80
million
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of
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users,
London
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 65
million
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, New
York
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 50
million
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, and
Sydney
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 almost 50
million
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tokyo, london, sydney, york, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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