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The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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The improvement of
science
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 will enhance people’s standards of living. In my opinion, I agree that the advancement of
science
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 helps people in many ways like in
food
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 production, entertainment, and healthcare. The development of
science
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 in the biology field will help us produce
food
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 in larger quantities by using urban farming. It is one of the effective ways to produce quality
food
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 for people, but it’s limited to the summer season, so with proper research scientists can produce all kinds of vegetables.
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, countries like India which has overpopulation are unable to meet the
food
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 demands of people,
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 by developing new organic farming methods or urban farming, the government can provide sufficient
food
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 and can even sell to other countries, which will improve countries economy.
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 the rapid growth in technology, it become easier for us to do work from remote locations, teach
students
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 effectively, etc.
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, during the Covid period,
students
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 were able to attend class even though they were at home and some
students
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 used
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 time effectively to learn different software, have wrote journals to enhance their resumes.
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, the growth of
science
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 can help us change our education and work methods. In conclusion, I would like to state that
science
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 is a key factor in the lives of human beings, we can avoid chemical farming and change to organic or urban farming and produce huge
food
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 with both quality and quantity. It is
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 useful in the circulation of data around the globe and learning became free for
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.
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