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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart displays some information about the results of research concerning the habit of drinking and purchasing
coffee
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 and tea in various cities in Australia.
Overall
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, the percentage of those people who went to a café for
coffee
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 or tea in the
last
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 4 weeks is the highest in all five towns.
In addition
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, buying fresh
coffee
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 accounted for the least proportion in all areas. In Sydney, just above 60 per cent of citizens went to a café to drink a cup of
coffee
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 or tea, and the proportions of those who bought fresh or instant
coffee
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 were both roughly 45%.
Furthermore
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, the percentage of people with the habit of going to a café in both Melbourne and Hobart is quite the same, nearly 64%.
Although
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 people in Hobart bought more instant
coffee
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 in the
last
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 couple of weeks, about 55%, those who lived in Melbourn purchased more fresh
coffee
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, almost 43%.
On the other hand
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, in Brisbane, the percentage of the habitats paid for instant
coffee
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 was just below the proportion of those who chose to go to a café, at 53% and 55% respectively,
while
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 only 35% bought fresh
coffee
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. Concerning Adelaide, the proportions of buying
coffee
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 and going to a café for drinking it were approximately the same, each 50%. Whilst those who paid for fresh
coffee
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 accounted for only 35%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, café with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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