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Are IT-related jobs valued more by society? Is the quality of products worse than before? What kinds of things do people like to repair by themselves? Why do people like to get their mobile phones repaired in specialized stores?

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Today, with the growing society, the demand for using IT inventions is increasing.
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, in medical examination and treatment,
instead
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 of the patient having to wait for data to be examined, thanks to the development of IT, it is only necessary to have a citizen’s identity card to be examined,
saves
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 a lot of time.
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, I think jobs related to the IT industry high appreciated by society In my opinion
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, I really think the quality of the product has declined in recent years. because of the shortage of human resources and the competition for profits of enterprises I think people like to repair TVs, washing machines, fans, and faucets by themselves because the problem that arises is very simple like a leaky faucet or a broken fan, just watch online video tutorials. So you can save money and time In my opinion, people fix their mobile phones in specialized stores because there are staff who specialize in fixing phones and when they have a fault .They have a warranty policy

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