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In some countries, companies allow people to work from home. In others, people are still expected to work in an office. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In
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 present times, few organizations permit
its
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 staff to perform tasks independently without any supervision.
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,
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 there are some other
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work places
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workplaces
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 that
demands
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demand
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face to face
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face-to-face
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 involvement, which cannot be handled digitally, I wholeheartedly
supports
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 the idea of online
work
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that
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apply
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I would elaborate
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along with
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 both ideologies in
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the following
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 paragraphs. To commence with
former
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 notion, the key point is that there are various kinds of
work
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 that can be managed online promptly. Even though, they demand
two- sided
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 interaction, which is manageable on phone,
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and laptop
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laptop
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laptops
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 using
internet
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an internet
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 connection.
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, covid pandemic revolutionized the world with the trend of working from home, where most
of
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individuals in various professions were asked by their employers to
work
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 by sitting at their homes
such
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 as teaching professionals, customer service assistants and many more.
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,
this
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 trend probably yielded better outcomes than visiting
workplace
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the workplace
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 and performing
work
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 responsibilities, which turns into
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the trend
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 of working independently from home and remained
continue
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 to follow.
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, some job places still
requires
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require
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 physical involvement by individuals. If they do not make regular
visit
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visits
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 to their job, they may not
able
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be able
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 to perform their duties and responsibilities during their
work
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 hours. To illustrate,
considering
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consider
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 the situation of doctors, nurses, engineers,
cleaners
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and cleaners
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,
as
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apply
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all these professionals must have to be physically present to do their
work
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,
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 because it cannot be performed at any online platform. Henceforth, it is significant for people in these streams to continue their
wok
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work
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 in their office or designated place. I personally concur that working with freedom is much better than doing
job
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a job
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 under someone's supervision all the
times
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time
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, as it offers more flexibility to one. In conclusion, it can be concluded that both
sort
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sorts
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 of working trends have
its
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their
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 own advantages.
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, the latter idea suits the majority 's needs. +
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