Many people had the view that it is better to buy their home rather than rent it. Do you agree or disagree this statement?

Many individuals considered that it purchasing their
house
better than hiring it. Personally, I totally agree with
this
statement and will demonstrate the reason why. With regards to individuals, purchasing their apartment helps us feel comfortable and convenient.
Firstly
,
family
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the family
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feel happy and interested because
box
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have
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freehold
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a freehold
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and
create
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something not allowed when they
hiring
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their
house
.
Secondly
, folk can expand and explain because if they buy something,
we
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won’t change to
other
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another house
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house
when they forgot to
paid
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for
host
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a host
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and built
the
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their
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dream
house
.
On the other hand
,
got
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getting
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their condo helps us feel
quite
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and chill. If they got the
house
, we will have a quiet room and concentrate because around the
house
didn’t have many houses and
noisies
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noises
, so you had
feel
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felt
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good to rest and did exercise very quietly. People chose to
got
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the
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house
near the company or city because it was convenient for commuting, so
you
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they
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worked by bus or car. It helped us to save time and did
necessary
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the necessary
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work. In conclusion,
purchased
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purchasing
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it had some
benefit
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benefits
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reasons for people so I believed that they thought it good
reasons
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reason
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to decide you should
did
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something.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • mortgage
  • rental agreement
  • down payment
  • equity
  • appreciate
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