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Many people hold the view that it is better to buy their home rather rent it.Do you agree with this statement or not?

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of
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people
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 think that it is better to buy a
house
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 rather than
rent
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 it.The writer
agree
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 with
this
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 statement and will demonstrate the reasons why the writer
agree
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 with it. On the one hand,
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people
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 who
work
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 far away from their
house
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they
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can
rent
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 a
house
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 for a short
time
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 to
work
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 there.They
also
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 save a lot of
time
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 to go
for
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work
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 and go back to their
house
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,
people
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 can make friends
arround
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around
 their
house
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 to create a good relationship to help each
others
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.When
people
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rent
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house
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, they have
a lots
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 of
time
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 to
thinking
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 about
create
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 a
familly
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family
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buy
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buying
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 a
house
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 to live long with it.
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 of
people
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rent
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who rent
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 a
house
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 was very high it accounting for
a
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half of
population
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the population
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that
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which
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mean
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people
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 are very confused about
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rent
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renting
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house
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a house
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 or
buy
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buying
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 a
house
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 for
them
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themselves
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.But many
risky
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 if
people
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rent
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 a
house
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 do not know about it,they can not repair their
house
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 as their hobby because it
ensure
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 that the next person
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rent
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who rent
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 will not
satisfied
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about
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 their hobby,every
places
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when
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where
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people
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rent
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house
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 will have many difficult rules to obey and it very noisy to keep up with.Incidents will happen
arround
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around
 their
house
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espeacilly
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especially
 the
house
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 when they
rent
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 it and they do not indemnify their asset about it,and high risk of fire and explosion is the most worry when
people
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rent
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 a
hose
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house
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,it can happen suddenly without forewarned for them
to
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run away.
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,
people
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buy
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 a
house
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 will have many
benifits
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benefits
to
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 them as
people
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 can make friends or their
neighbor
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neighbour
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to
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make a large relationship.
People
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 do not worry
the
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 price they have to pay for their
house
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 each
months
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month
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 or the price spike
for
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each
years
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year
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 and do not pay for repair for
your
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their
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house
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 each
months
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month
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,they
also
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 save
a lots
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a lot
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 of money for them to do many things.When
people
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 retire,they do not know how to make money when they
out
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 of money,so the
house
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 they buy before they retire will become a good place for them to relax and enjoy
thier
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their
 life.Many
people
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 will have
a
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 imagination to create their
house
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 for their hobby and
feeling
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 free when they go back
their
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home.
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,the feeling when they prond their asset they take a long
time
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 to get it. In conclusion,
people
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 should buy a
house
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 for them to live
comfortable
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 and
do
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not worry
the
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 public area when they
rent
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 a
house
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.
People
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 who
work
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 or study far away from their
house
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 should
rent
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 a
house
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 to live
their
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there
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 for a short
time
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,it easy to stable their
work
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 and study.
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,it will become a good place to relax and enjoy their life when they retire
their
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from their
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work
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 and do not worry
the
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 price they have to pay each
months
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month
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,.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • property ladder
  • mortgage
  • rental agreement
  • down payment
  • equity
  • appreciate
  • rental market
  • monthly installments
  • credit score
  • repairs and maintenance
  • landlord
  • tenant
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