Topic: More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people suggest that the solution to this problem is to increase the price of fattening foods. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is that

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youngsters

preferring

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enormous

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number of fast

food

which is very dangerous for their health. Now

peopleare

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people are

beginning to realize that, many civilians suffering from being overweight and becoming more and more careless regarding their

heaalth

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health

. Personally, I partially agree with the notion. The reasons

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my agreement are expanding in the following paragraphs.

Firstly

, it is well known that citizens who are living in rural areas

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mostly prefer fattening

foods

because they do not have enough knowledge about health problems which causes them by eating fast

food

. What I mean here is that, if the

prices

for

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fattening

foods

are increased in the rural areas

then

to some extent people are moving towards healthy

food

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they do not have higher paid salary jobs. A good case in point is to rise up

prices

for the most popular fattening

foods

such

as pizzas, burgers,

sandwiches

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because it is an effective way to reduce selling

such

food

.

On the other hand

, it can

also

be argued that people with

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overweight

body are just

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not have

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enough

motivation to do some sport for their own future.

That is

to

say

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not everyone can afford enough money for

themselfs

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themselves

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to do some sports. Take

for example

one of the

simpliest

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simplest

way

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to reach our goal is just we need to reduce

prices

for

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gym membership which

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can grow up their motivation. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis we can say that there

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a lot of ways to solve

this

global problem.

Hence

, I

am agree

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with the idea

about

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increasing the

prices

of fast

foods

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.