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The two maps below demonstrate an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

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The two maps below demonstrate an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
Overall
, a comparison of the two maps shows a change from desert island to tourist facilities. The most noticeable change is
constructions
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construction
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. There were built a lot of accommodations,
restaurant
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restaurants
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,
reception
 and pier. They were all connected
with
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by
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 footpaths and vehicle tracks. The restaurant was in the north,
reception
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the reception
a reception
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 was almost in the centre of
island
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the island
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 and
pier
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the pier
a pier
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 was south of the
reception
. There are two sailboats on the pier.
In
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 the right and left side of the
reception
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 there are dwellings for tourists. There is
also
 a footpath leading to the beach. Only a few palm trees were planted to the east of the houses.
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