The bar charts below give the information about USA marriage and divorces rates between 1970 and 2000 and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the year.

The bar charts below give the information about USA marriage and divorces rates between 1970 and 2000 and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the year.
The provided bar graph illustrates information about
change
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the change
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in the number of marriages and divorces from 1970 to 2000, with data presented in 10-year intervals on
million
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a million
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scale. In
additon
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addition
, the other bar graph shows
marital
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the marital
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status
of adult Americans rate the same period on the percentage scale.
Overall
, the number of
marriges
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marriages
marriage
almost did not change. The
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was stable. In
deteil
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detail
, American's adults marital
status
of married
decresed
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decreased
by 10% than in 1970.
However
,
status
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the status
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of never married and divorced
was
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increased
than
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in 1970
about
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5% and around 2% respectively. And, widowed
status
had
adults
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people that decreased by only about 1%. When it comes to
maggiages
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marriages
and
divorces
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divorce
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figure
patterns, the number of
maggiages
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marriages
maggies
went down by 0.5
million
since 1980.
On the other hand
,
divorces
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the divorces
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figure
increased by about 0.5
million
between 1970 and 1980. But, the
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decreased again by about 0.5
million
from 1980 to 2000.
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