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The bar charts below give the information about USA marriage and divorces rates between 1970 and 2000 and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the year.

The bar charts below give the information about USA marriage and divorces rates between 1970 and 2000 and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the year.
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The provided bar graph illustrates information about
change
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the change
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 in the number of marriages and divorces from 1970 to 2000, with data presented in 10-year intervals on
million
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a million
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 scale. In
additon
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addition
, the other bar graph shows
marital
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the marital
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status
 of adult Americans rate the same period on the percentage scale.
Overall
, the number of
marriges
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marriages
marriage
 almost did not change. The
figure
 was stable. In
deteil
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detail
, American's adults marital
status
 of married
decresed
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decreased
 by 10% than in 1970.
However
,
status
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the status
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 of never married and divorced
was
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apply
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increased
than
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in 1970
about
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by about
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 5% and around 2% respectively. And, widowed
status
 had
adults
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adult
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 people that decreased by only about 1%. When it comes to
maggiages
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marriages
 and
divorces
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divorce
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figure
 patterns, the number of
maggiages
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marriages
maggies
 went down by 0.5
million
 since 1980.
On the other hand
,
divorces
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the divorces
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figure
 increased by about 0.5
million
 between 1970 and 1980. But, the
figure
 decreased again by about 0.5
million
 from 1980 to 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, status, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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