The supplied graph represents the proportion of tourists to England who went certain attractions in Brighton between 1980 and 2010.
The supplied graph represents the proportion of tourists to England who went
certain
attractions in Brighton between 1980 and 2010.
It is obvious that all of the four attractions Change preposition
to certain
were fluctuated
, Change to the active voice
fluctuated
have fluctuated
while
festival attraction
had dropped slightly by 2010.
Concerning Pavilion, in 1980 the total tourist Fix the agreement mistake
attractions
attraction
was approximately 25% which then
climbed shaprply
to a peak Correct your spelling
sharply
around
50% in 1995. Change preposition
of around
However
, from 1995 Pavilion has
decreased to around 35% in 2000 and steadily declined to 30%. The Pier Unnecessary verb
apply
attratction
showed fluctuations Correct your spelling
attraction
attractions
throught
the years in comparison to a Pavilion. Correct your spelling
through
throughout
Usually
the trend was upward, Add a comma
,Usually
as a
result
it ended at Add the comma(s)
,result
modest
20 Correct article usage
a modest
pecentages
in 2010.
The percentage of Festival slightly fell from 30% to around 25% in 1995 and Correct your spelling
percentages
percentage
then
gradually grow again to a
almost 30%. During all Correct article usage
apply
this
time Festival has not shown the
fluctuations and was the most stable Correct determiner usage
any
attraction
. By contrast
, the Art Gallery had sharply grown to peak in 1985 from humble
20% to almost 40% ,but Correct article usage
a humble
then
had delined
dramatically to around 9% by 2010, being the least Correct your spelling
declined
prefferesd
Correct your spelling
preferred
attraction
in Brighton.Submitted by dnm.best on
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