The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee nd tea buying and drinking habits

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee nd tea buying and drinking habits
The bar chart illustrates the outcome of research about people's
coffee
and tea buying and drinking habits if five Australian cities
such
as Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane,
Adelaide
and Hobart in the
last
four weeks.
Overall
, the majority of people went to a cafe for
coffee
or tea
while
the least residents brought fresh
coffee
instead
of instant
coffee
.
To begin
with, except
Adelaide
, Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart show the highest values for
went
Wrong verb form
going
show examples
to a cafe for
coffee
or tea between 55% to 65%
while
Adelaide
at 49%. The least people who brought instant
coffee
in Sydney at around 46% and the highest percentage showed in Hobart at 53%. The other three countries fluctuated between 45%-53%. Among the three factors, brought fresh
coffee
illustrated lower consumers. Both Brisbane and
Adelaide
account for approximately 33% and 34& respectively. The rest of the three countries fluctuated between lower than 44% and greater than 38%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • percentage
  • frequency
  • preference
  • health benefits
  • caffeine content
  • cultural significance
  • consumption
  • trends
  • venues
  • social aspects
  • beverage
  • shift
  • influence
  • comparison
  • analysis
  • discussion
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