The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by choosing and describe the main idea, and make comparisons where appropriate.

The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005.

Summarise the information by choosing and describe the main idea, and make comparisons where appropriate.
The provided bar chart illustrates information about
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the change
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change
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changes
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in other
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countries'
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employment
figure
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between 1995 and 2005, with data presented on
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a percentage
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scale.
Overall
,
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the male's
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rate
higher
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is higher
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than
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the female's
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rate
. And, in 2005
employment
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rate
higher
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than in 1995
rate
. When it comes to male patterns, Iceland had the
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highest
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in 1995 and 2005.
They
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figure had around 85% in 2005. And,
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of the UK significantly increased by about 18% than in 1995.
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, Newzealand and The USA increased by 10%. And, Australia's
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lowest by around 55% ,70% and in 1995 ,2005 respectively.
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Australia
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Australian
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female's
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of the lowest too. the highest female
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, Newzealand female figure significantly increased by about 16% than in 1995. And, The USA
rate
increased by around 14% too. Iceland and the UK went up by just 10% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment rates
  • economic indicators
  • comparative analysis
  • trends and patterns
  • economic factors
  • stability and change
  • sector-specific
  • job market
  • workforce participation
  • fluctuations
  • economic growth
  • unemployment
  • recession
  • boom
  • labor market dynamics
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