The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by choosing and describe the main idea, and make comparisons where appropriate.
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, Newzealand and The USA increased by 10%. And, Australia's rate
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, Newzealand female figure significantly increased by about 16% than in 1995. And, The USA rate
increased by around 14% too. Iceland and the UK went up by just 10% respectively.Submitted by moneekun on
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