You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about wheter to go to college or to try get a job. you think he/she should get a job. write a letter to this friend. In your letter - say why he/she would not enjoy going to college - explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her - suggest types of jobs that would be suitable for him/her

Dear Jean, I writing
this
letter regarding between going to college or
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jobs
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. Let me describe my opinions. As I know about your reason, you say about your family have
a
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economics
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. In
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, you have 2 little
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that currently in studied on elementary
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. With
this
issue, I would prefer you to go to get
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because now many
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wants to
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person who has
experience
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to
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thier
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their
jobs
. During the university, it
also
needs to
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more in college
besides
students fees. For
instances
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, when you had laboratory courses, it made you
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more in printing the files, and
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some equipment to support your study.
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, I thought you to
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some job than
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on
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university
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. With
this
problem, I'd like you to find the
jobs
that you
really
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interest
with
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. If you prefer
in
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managing files, I'd suggest you
to
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find
the
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jobs
that have related like admins
jobs
and hospitality
jobs
, because
this
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roles don't really
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high
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. I kindly ask you to review my opinions. I'm looking forward
for
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your
decisions
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. Regards,
Jion
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