improvemnts in health, education and trade are essessential for the development of poorer nations. however, the goverments of richer nations should take responsibilities for helping the poorer nations in such areas. to what extend do you agree?

Health, education and trade are the most needed basic infrusture in the poorer nations to initiate its development.
For
this
reason
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when the
country
faces financial
problem
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problems
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in managing
such
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scarcity
, wealthier
nation
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schools support
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all their possible ways. Doing so will not only helps the poorer
country
but
also
raises their value for helping
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need. I do agree with the statement and in the following
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To begin
with, when the
country
is battling its poverty there will be no other options
then
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to go for global help in restoring their basic needs. When in
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bigger countries are responsible for their support.
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will help build and continue their developmental activities.
For example
, Bhutan during its early nineties
country
is
under developed
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, more foreign supporters are taken during that time.
This
helped them build schools; hospitals by which people are now more educated and
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good health facilities became economically stable now after two decades. Recently Bhutan has graduated from
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developed
country
. Some people argue that it is not
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to seek help when the
country
is not able to cope with the growing demand for
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health facilities. The
country
itself has to put in hard work to maintain balance in the
country
. If not it will be like Tibetans who were once too dependent on China later got annexed becoming its victim.
However
there is no other way
then
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to seek help, but it will be
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country’s
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to
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whom to seek and from
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to receive donation
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. In a nutshell, providing help and making poorer
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healthier by means of building basic infrastructure will benefit not only the host nation but donors too, it is always interdependent.
Therefore
it is always wiser to pull up challenged nations.
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