improvemnts in health, education and trade are essessential for the development of poorer nations. however, the goverments of richer nations should take responsibilities for helping the poorer nations in such areas. to what extend do you agree?
Health, education and trade are the most needed basic infrusture in the poorer nations to initiate its development.
For
this
reason
when the Add a comma
,reason
country
faces financial problem
in managing Fix the agreement mistake
problems
such
scarsity
, wealthier Correct your spelling
scarcity
nation
schools support Replace the word
national
in
all their possible ways. Doing so will not only helps the poorer Correct pronoun usage
it in
country
but also
raises their value for helping in
need. I do agree with the statement and in the following Correct pronoun usage
those in
lines
I will explain more on the given topic.
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,lines
To begin
with, when the country
is battling its poverty there will be no other options then
to go for global help in restoring their basic needs. When in Replace the word
than
such
situation
bigger countries are responsible for their support. Correct article usage
a situation
This
will help build and continue their developmental activities. For example
, Bhutan during its early nineties country
is under developed
, more foreign supporters are taken during that time. Correct your spelling
underdeveloped
This
helped them build schools; hospitals by which people are now more educated and having
good health facilities became economically stable now after two decades. Recently Bhutan has graduated from Wrong verb form
have
least
developed Correct article usage
the least
country
.
Some people argue that it is not necessarily
to seek help when the Change the word
necessary
country
is not able to cope with the growing demand for the
health facilities. The Correct article usage
apply
country
itself has to put in hard work to maintain balance in the country
. If not it will be like Tibetans who were once too dependent on China later got annexed becoming its victim. However
there is no other way then
to seek help, but it will be Replace the word
than
on
Change preposition
in
country’s
Correct article usage
the country’s
hand
Fix the agreement mistake
hands
to
whom to seek and from Change preposition
apply
who
to receive donation Change the pronoun
whom
offer
.
In a nutshell, providing help and making poorer Fix the agreement mistake
offers
nation
healthier by means of building basic infrastructure will benefit not only the host nation but donors too, it is always interdependent. Fix the agreement mistake
nations
Therefore
it is always wiser to pull up challenged nations.Submitted by rinchennima77 on
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