The graph and the table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.

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The line graph depicts the usage of

water

globally by three different sectors which are Agriculture, Industrial and Domestic use,

while

, the table illustrates the percentage of that consumed in 2 nations in the

year

2000.

Overall

according to

graph

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the graph

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the

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water

was used at

highest

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the highest

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level by the agriculture sector as compared to rest two segments,

whereas

, as per the table Brazil has

maximum

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the maximum

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amount of

water

utilization in comparison to Congo. On the one hand,

water

used by Agriculture part has dramatically surged from 500 km3 in the

year

1990 to

3000km3

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3000 km3

in the

year

2000.

Moreover

, Industrial use and domestic use of

water

was

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consistent at

same

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the same

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level between the years 1900 to 1950 at only 2km3 respectively,

however

, it rose gradually in the

year

2000

where

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the Industrial usage was

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600km3 and

domestic

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the domestic

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sector was at only 200km3 which was at lowest as compared to other two parts.

According to

the table, Brazil had the highest population with 176 million, irrigated land at 26,500km2 and

water

consumption

each

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individual at 359m3,

whereas

in contrast

, the

water

consumption in

Democratic

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Republic of Congo country was

least

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the least

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in all areas.

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