the charts below show the changes in onwership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. summaring the information by slecting and reporting hte main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the charts below show the changes in onwership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

summaring the information by slecting and reporting hte main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The top line
graph
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shows the
percentage
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of households
who
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owned three types of electrical appliances- washing machine,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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, and vacuum cleaner- in the
99 year
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99-year
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period
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between 1920 and 2019. And the bottom
graph
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shows the
number
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of
hours
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that each household spent on housework each week during the same entire
period
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.
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, there are two key points.
First,
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throughout the entire
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, washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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, and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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were similar in that the
percentage
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of them all increased significantly in 99 years. And
secondly
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, people spent less time
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doing housework each week- washing clothes, preparing meals, and cleaning- in
this
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period
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. Looking at the top
graph
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in more detail we can see that at the beginning of
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entire
period
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, the
percentage
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of
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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was only above 0 percent.
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number
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then
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grew dramatically before reaching the maximum of 100% in 1980. It
then
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remained
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at the
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same level from 1980 to 2019.
However
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, the other two categories of electrical appliances increased more steadily. In 1920, there was just 40% of washing machine, but by the end of the
period
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,
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number
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had reached over 70%. At the same time, the
percentage
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of vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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increased from only 30% in 1920 to 100% in 2000. Turning to the second
graph
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, the
number
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of
hours
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of housework each week decreased gradually throughout the entire
period
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.
This
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number
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fell more rapidly from 50
hours
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in 1920 to approximately 20
hours
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in 1960.
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is a drop of 30
hours
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in only 40 years. It
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decreased more moderately until 2019, from 20
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to just over 10
hours
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, percentage, period, number, hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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