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the charts below show the changes in onwership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. summaring the information by slecting and reporting hte main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the charts below show the changes in onwership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. summaring the information by slecting and reporting hte main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The top line
graph
 shows the
percentage
 of households
who
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 owned three types of electrical appliances- washing machine,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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, and vacuum cleaner- in the
99 year
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99-year
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period
 between 1920 and 2019. And the bottom
graph
 shows the
number
 of
hours
 that each household spent on housework each week during the same entire
period
.
Overall
, there are two key points.
First,
throughout the entire
period
, washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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, and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 were similar in that the
percentage
 of them all increased significantly in 99 years. And
secondly
, people spent less time
in
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doing housework each week- washing clothes, preparing meals, and cleaning- in
this
period
. Looking at the top
graph
 in more detail we can see that at the beginning of
this
 entire
period
, the
percentage
 of
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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 was only above 0 percent.
This
number
then
 grew dramatically before reaching the maximum of 100% in 1980. It
then
 remained
the
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at the
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 same level from 1980 to 2019.
However
, the other two categories of electrical appliances increased more steadily. In 1920, there was just 40% of washing machine, but by the end of the
period
 ,
this
number
 had reached over 70%. At the same time, the
percentage
 of vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 increased from only 30% in 1920 to 100% in 2000. Turning to the second
graph
, the
number
 of
hours
 of housework each week decreased gradually throughout the entire
period
.
This
number
 fell more rapidly from 50
hours
 in 1920 to approximately 20
hours
 in 1960.
This
 is a drop of 30
hours
 in only 40 years. It
then
 decreased more moderately until 2019, from 20
hours
 to just over 10
hours
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, percentage, period, number, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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