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Accident reductions per kilometer in Bridgewater following the introduction of extra lanes on busy motorways.

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Overall
, all motorways witnessed a downward trend after the appearance of extra
street
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.
Furthermore
, M5 recorded the most evident decrease in the chart. M2 and M5 shared the same starting point of 17
accidents
 per
kilometre
. After extra
artery
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 were constructed, the number of
calamity
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 per
kilometre
 in M5 had been reduced by 10.
By contrast
, a significant decline of 2 was witnessed in M2. A
further
 look into the chart reveals that there were 4
accidents
 per
kilometre
 in M3, which was halved following the introduction of extra lanes. M4 registered a much higher original statistic at 7
accidents
 per
kilometre
 before falling to the same level as M3. 13 and 5
accidents
 per
kilometre
 were observed in M1 before and after extra lanes were established, respectively.
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