Many people hold the view that it is better to buy their home rather than rent it. Do you agree or not.

In an ever progressive society, there is
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question
whether
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if
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apply
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people should invest
for
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in
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their own
accomodations
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accommodations
accommodation
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for temporary flats. In my opinion, I agree that people should buy their
home
instead
of
renitng
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renting
it. First of all, the problem of buying or renting a
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house
nowdays
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is popular with young adults, especially the freshman who just graduated the university. In my view, if you have
own
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flat, you will have many advantages and
convenient
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.
For example
, you can make decisions about your future
home
. You can build more rooms,
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and expand
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the playgrounds.
Secondly
, it could be used to make money by
renitng
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renting
it to others.
Futhemore
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Furthermore
, earning a salary from it can increase your finance and gain more relationships.
On the other hand
, some teenagers are afraid that if they rent a house, they will be cheated of money.
Therefore
, buying a
housw
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house
is the best way to have security and safety.
Finally
, to own
home
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a home
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we won't get into trouble with the landlords. You don't have to
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the tax
include
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water, electricity,
trash
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and trash
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. In conclusion, buying a
home
is good for you than renting one. And we
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should
shoule
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should
buy
apartment
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an apartment
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or house which
are
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is
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suitable for your fund
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • property ladder
  • mortgage
  • rental agreement
  • down payment
  • equity
  • appreciate
  • rental market
  • monthly installments
  • credit score
  • repairs and maintenance
  • landlord
  • tenant
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