The chart below shows the number of passengers arriving at a train station per hour across a day, and also the average price of their tickets.

The chart below shows the number of passengers  arriving at a train station  per hour across a day,  and also the average price of their tickets.
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As an introduction, the table gives information on the number of passengers who arrive at a certain train station 2 hourly from 6 AM to 10
PM
in a day
,
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and changes in ticket charges during the same hours.
Overall
, it can be seen that the ticket price is going up
along with
the number of passengers except at 6
PM
, where the price is at the lowest.
To begin
with, a large crowd of people arrive at the station at 10 AM , 12
PM
and 6
PM
where the numbers
are fluctuating
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from 670 to 700.
Furthermore
, around 300 passengers reach there at 10 AM, 2
PM
and 10
PM
,
whereas
at 6 AM and 8
PM
, we can observe a slight rise in arrivals for more than 450.
However
, the least number of people come at 4
PM
which is 230. When considering ticket prices, around $30 is charged for a pass at 8 AM and 12
PM
. During the rest, charges fluctuate around $20, but the lowest price is at 6
PM
where the rate is $11.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pm with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • number of passengers
  • arriving
  • train station
  • per hour
  • throughout the day
  • average ticket price
  • progressively increases
  • mid-afternoon
  • gradually decreases
  • peak
  • approximately
  • early morning
  • late evening
  • lowest
  • averaging
  • slight fluctuation
  • highest average price
  • observed
  • mid-morning
  • fluctuation
  • not significant
  • difference
  • relatively small
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