In my parts of the world, children's lives were very different from today. What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of life for children in the past?

In the past,
children
were able to reach a very high level.
This
is because their comprehensive research always kept them busy, finding things that would make their work easier not only technology, but
also
all science and medicine. Because we know that there were many state wars in the past and they suffered, and they spent their lives doing
such
research so that they would not suffer. And it can be added that in the past
children
did not has careers a simple
example
of
this
is walking home from school it is much better than taking some
children
by car. In the past,
children
were often exposed to government strikes,
for
example
, they moved to another place when they were
strack
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stuck
or because there was not enough food. They always played natural games, a simple
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example
of
this
is dangerous, swimming in the river in places
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they could drown these aspects are different from the good conditions now they don't have special school busses textbooks these aspects are their biggest disadvantages. In conclusion, the
children
of the past had many good points, they are different from the natural ones of the present,
for
example
, they ate natural juice or natural things, so they became healthy.
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