Some people believe that governments should ban dangerous sports. Others claim that they should have freedom to choose their favourite activities. Discuss both views and present your opinion.
Some individuals think that authorities should prohibit risky
sports
. Others feel that people
should have freedom
to Add an article
the freedom
playing
any Change the form of the verb
play
sports
they want. In my opinion, Fix the agreement mistake
sport
people
should have freedom
to play any Add an article
the freedom
sports
they desire due to
advancements of
technology, and dangerous Change preposition
in
sports
can enhance local
economy of countries.
On the one hand, some think Correct article usage
the local
the
lawmakers should prohibit harmful Correct article usage
apply
sports
. This
is because risky sports
can have a negative impacts
on Correct the article-noun agreement
impact
people
health. To illustrate, Change noun form
people's
people
who playing
risky Wrong verb form
play
sports
are more vulnerable to get
serious injuries. Wrong verb form
getting
For example
, people
who climb mountains are more likely to fall from Correct article usage
the mountain
mountain
and get Fix the agreement mistake
mountains
injury
in their body or even Add an article
an injury
they
died. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Furthermore
, risky sports
can put lot
of pressure on Change the article
a lot
healthcare
system. Add an article
the healthcare
This
is because many people
on
society will struggle with injuries and need to go to hospitals in order to take medications or surgery, which Change preposition
in
this
can make Correct pronoun usage
apply
financial
burden on Add an article
the financial
a financial
Correct article usage
the governments
governments
public budget.
Change noun form
government's
On the other hand
, I would like to agree with those people
who believe the governments
should Fix the agreement mistake
government
allows
Change the verb form
allow
people
to play any sports
they want. To begin
with, thanks to advancements on
technology, there are several safety equipment Change preposition
in
people
can use to protect themselves namely, life jacket
, Fix the agreement mistake
jackets
helmet
, Fix the agreement mistake
helmets
eyes
Correct word choice
and eyes
protective
. Replace the word
protectors
Therefore
, these equipment
can mitigate Change the determiner
this equipment
a
chance of Correct article usage
the
get
injuries for Change the verb form
getting
people
, which this
Correct pronoun usage
apply
mean
playing risky Change the verb form
means
sports
has become safer than before. Moreover
, risky sports
can boosts
Wrong verb form
boost
local
Correct article usage
the local
econmoy
of Correct your spelling
economy
country
. To demonstrate, many tourists will visit many Correct article usage
the country
country
in order to watch dangerous Change to a plural noun
countries
sports
such
as,
skydiving, and Remove the comma
apply
climb
Wrong verb form
climbing
mountians
. Correct your spelling
mountains
Consequently
, tourists will spend more money on hotels, public transport, and food, which this
can Correct pronoun usage
apply
leads
to Wrong verb form
lead
prosper
the economy of Change the verb form
prospering
country
.
Add an article
the country
a country
To sum up
, I totally believe governments should allow people
to do any activities they want because advancements on
technology related to safety, and risky Change preposition
in
sports
can enhance local
economy via attract Correct article usage
the local
tourism
industry.Correct article usage
the tourism
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